Fourth of July is very amportent day for all Americans,its Independence Day.
In the United States,Independence day,commonly known as the Fourth of July,is afederal holiday commemorating adoption of the declaration of Independence in July 4,1776,declaring the independence from Kingdom of Great Britain.
This is a happy day to celebrate with your family and friends.We all have agreat time with each other while eating barbeque.We sit near the beach watching the fireworks go out with pretty colors glowing in the dark .My family and friends spend all night listening to loud noises from the fireworks.
I will never forget this day because when I have been take the test to get citizen the officer ask me what is the Fourth of July ?I answer him The Independence Day.
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Hi Wediyan!
ReplyDeleteHow are you? Ok! I like your story here. But, I noticed a few mistakes.
1.) capitalization...there are some words here that need capitalized. Can you fix them?
2.) instead of 'when I have been to take the test" what can you say? When you answered the officer, was it in the past?
3.) Your first two sentences need a bit of work. I like how you start the sentence (Fourth of July is very amportent day for all Americans) but you have a word spelled incorrectly. Your next part (It is Independence Day) either needs to have a : before it or it should be a new sentence.
If you want, make these changes and then I will grade this again!
11/15 :-) Kristi