I chose United States of America for the best place in the world because America has so many wonderful and exciting features that you may experience in your life,and there are many reasons make America the best place.
First of all the opportunities,there are so many jobs to chose from.Many jobs will pay off some of your bills ,and some jobs will pay for the medical insurance.Financial aid its very good chance for everyone to complete the study and get career.Another opportunity the loans help you to get house or open business.
Second, there are so many different kinds of religions and cultures that are joined together in the United States.I like the freedom here there is no racism between religions.I have learnd about the cultures when I meet new friends here.
Third,there are so many schools and colleges that helps you get ready for the next step in the future.Teachers and professors have you memorize alot of information that you will need to know or will be using down the road in life .
In conclusion,I chose to write about U.S.A as my topic because I have alot of amazing experiences from the time being here .It is awonderful place to live in.
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ReplyDeleteNot bad for a first try at this! I like the ideas and thoughts that you displayed in this writing!
Here are a few of the problems that I see:
1. a lot is two words-- not alot.
2. You really need to look and make sure you have articles (a, an , the) when you need them. In your first sentence, you need a 'the' before United States. This also goes for missing words. In that same paragraph, I see a 'that' mising and you should have 'as' rather than 'for' before best place.
3. You are missing a period between two sentences in paragraph 3.
Fix those things (if you want), and I will give you a higher score. I placed your grade in UCompass!
:-) Kristi
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